danipower0204

I only have one problem with your poem, the flow. It reads like a list. You are telling us facts, facts, facts. That's it. I have read this multiple times ...

I have to say, this was very very wonderful. I cannot believe you are 14 and writing this sort of stuff. Your first stanza hooks very nicely. You used great ...

I would have much rather read about what insomnia feels like. I was an insomniac for a good 6 months. And I can describe what it felt like. It was ...

I find myself sitting in the dark , my door is locked , the curtains are down , i know what I 've done as sharp shooting pain takes over ...

Hi there, so I've been reading your poems since just recently. And you're pretty much an idol right now. However, I agree with both Suzanne and Demoness. I think they're ...

You know what, I actually liked this. Not the kind of thing you would read on here normally. Short, simple. However, devoid of ANY real literary devices. My only (rather ...

Hi there. OK, straight to the point, since it's late. Your someone said before. But that's all. It doesn't really read like a poem. Sure, you have structure, punctuation, all ...

So, you've written a very relevant poem. Seeing as no one been very harsh to you til now, I'm sorry that I will, but I'll be constructive. Good spelling, like ...

Everlasting, Never-ending I want to see your face, I want your face to see mine, But we watch with memories. I long to hold you tight, I long for you ...

In the land of white trash, there was a boy who gave a crap. His name was Martin E Nash, and he just wouldn't shut his trap. When the kids ...

Wow. I likes it a lot. It has a double meaning a lot of the time. Are you talking about a watermelon or about a person? Or both? That's why ...

Nice. I like it. It's simple and beautiful. However a rhyme feels a little forced. Specifically: weary and drear feels a little forced to me. Other than that, I like ...

From the words of a monster I hate you, From the eyes of a winner who makes it through. I don't get this line. From the person you love I ...

This was quite a funny piece. I enjoyed it for what it was, which was a light-hearted, comedic piece of poetry. I think this would make a great children's piece ...

OK, so I don't really know the story between the two, but I can comment on your imagery and poem. Not much to be said, you painted a wonderful picture. ...