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Re: Snowman
This was great, you made the cheerful snowman I look forward to creating every year as soon as we get enough snow seem dark and eery. Let's just say that ...
Nov 4, 2010 -
Re: The Tales of a Common Bus Driver
Hey there! This was great, each character was so different and well-explained even down to the smallest detail. I agree with a previous review though that there really isn't much ...
Nov 4, 2010 -
Re: Chains.
Yes, write more! I loved your story, aside from some punctuation errors, I thought you had a good ending! It was a good story, and its subject is right up ...
Nov 4, 2010 -
Re: Old Poem
I just finished reading/reviewing your Russian Roulette story and I found the link to this, to my surprise it was you again! I definitely think your strengths lean more towards ...
Nov 3, 2010 -
Re: Old Story
Hey there, Can't decide whether I like this or not. I don't really get it and that's making it harder to like. It has potential but it needs some work. ...
Nov 3, 2010 -
Re: Frozen Love, Heated Pain
Hey there, I don't really know how to say this. :) Well let's just say I posted something a few hours ago in Historical Fiction. New idea, been swimming around ...
Nov 3, 2010 -
Re: Deleted Story
Hey! First of all may I just say that your opening paragragh read like a torture scene from a Saw movie which unfortunately I had the unfortunate pleasure of witnessing ...
Nov 1, 2010 -
Re: The Funeral
hey there! I don't really have time for a total review but my first impression was that your story was interesting. The title peaked my interest and when I clicked ...
Nov 1, 2010 -
Re: Heaven
hey there! I liked this a lot! I'd just like to say that I like your ending with the statement about the doll, it seems right that a little girl ...
Nov 1, 2010 -
Re: Red roads through Gettysburg
Hey there! I thought your story was pretty good! Here are the problems I had with it: 1. There were a lot of spelling errors. 2. The journal entries seemed ...
Nov 1, 2010 -
Re: The Curse of the Queen
Hello Daydreamer here: Nice story! But here's a few things I noticed: 1. Two trained bodyguards came to the queen's rescue and couldn't manage to stop a single man with ...
Dec 12, 2009 -
Re: First story-- part 3
Hey Dreamy! Thanks for reviewing my work. Here's my review of yours. I love the way you write. It seems so alive and real. But a lot of your sentences ...
Nov 22, 2009 -
Re: My Soul Has Been Cut In Half
Hello daydreamer here: First of all, I really enjoyed your story, it was very emotional and it eerily reminded me of a story I had written a few years ago. ...
Nov 16, 2009 -
Re: Memoirs of a Monster: A Fictional Tale of Nazi Germany
Hello there: I must say you have me hooked, and i can't wait for more! Your descriptions are haunting and capture the reader's attention. I personally love this time period ...
Nov 8, 2009 -
Re: Mary the Slave girl
Hey there, im Angela. I enjoyed your story, it was very well written but i had a few objections. First, the title. ''Mary the Slave Girl'' is very shallow and ...
Nov 8, 2009
