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Okay, I like what you have here. The letter thing works, but I really think you should change the title and John's name. If you aren't already aware of this, ...

I really liked the way you did this with the different quotes and all. He takes a deep breath, his throats gone dry *throat's He doesn't have multiple throats. Throat's=throat ...

I like how you did the red. It was very unique. I thought this would be a sappy cliche love poem when I first saw the title. I'm glad it ...

Okay, so this a pretty neat little prologue you have here. I'm hooked. I'm looking forward to discovering why the King kept the baby, essentially the baby's significance. Some, however, ...

I guess this is an okay beginning. Nothing exciting has really happened. Yet. There isn't anything "messed up" that I can sense in this first chapter, but I'm pretty confident ...

I'm not much of a poetry reviewer, but I feel that this is really cliche. It reminds me of several songs. You could add some personal touches to the poem. ...

This is indeed an interesting idea to ponder on. I like your comparison of humans to cars. There are, however, a few grammatical errors but that can be easily fixed. ...

Hahaha. You made me laugh. This was a clever twist. Very original. Confetti did a pretty decent job with the nitpicks, so I won't say anything about them. I don't ...

This story was a very sweet and touching one. I could imagine this as a children's book. Your charaterization of the child, Gabby, was very well done. I could hear ...

I haven't read your novel, but I have to agree with confetti. You should definitely change the names. If I were a reader, I'd definitely feel paranoid at all times. ...

First off, I'd like to mention that I love the irony of your title. Very sarcastic. Being that this is the first chapter, I guess it's okay for it to ...

This is a pretty powerful piece you've got here. There is so much emotion and I can just feel the sadness. It was hard to see my father laying the ...

This poem was quite interesting. The image your poem gives off is very romantic and I love your word choices. It's beautifully written. However, you made a few minor grammatical ...

Hi Aushy. :D I haven't kept up with Limitless, but I do like this flashback/memory. Your writing is very fluid and I quite enjoyed your choice in vocabulary. I didn't ...

It was very heartfelt and touching. The flow of the words was empowering and almost left me with tears. I commend you for your bravery in sharing with us and ...