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It's a nice read. I'm still wondering what happened and what she is despite the fact the title is "dollhouse" so I'm assuming she's a doll? I like your writing ...

It was fine. You weren't wandering. Yeah, I guess that's how things tend to be. I moved when I was nine, so I totally get what it's like. People are ...

I get it. It's about a clock, right? Nevermind, I don't get it. I haven't learned physics yet :( I'll look at it again in a couple of years. :) ...

Lol. I can see this as a children's book. Little children would adore it. :) The pictures would be so cute. You grew wings overnight, a nd now you think ...

:) Lol. I was wondering why the name Mary-Sue sounded so familiar at first. Yeah, that's pretty much how a lot of stories go. Flawless chracters achieving everything and ending ...

Hi. You must continue writing this. I don't really know what's going on, what the situation is between the couple. Why are they acting the way they are? What is ...

Hi. You should continue on this poem. Descibe more. Why does it look magical and mysterious? What colour is this flower? In the beginning, you write "In that little burst ...

Hi Aristotle. Lovely imagery. You should totally continue on this. It flows nicely. Nitpick: I lay down on my blanket, And I think about these things, That I smell. I ...

Hey Spike. I like the idea, but I was a bit confused with the first paragraph/stanza or whatever it's called. I like how it was written, it was truly powerful, ...

:) This made me smile. I'm not sure if that was you were aiming for, but it did. I get the hurt that you're trying to express and experiences with ...

Congrats on being featured. shubhiloves2write and everyone else seems to have gotten everything that I was gonna say... so yeah :oops: Like Biffle said, you should totally show this to ...

That was really good. It was pretty. I like your story idea. :) It sounds interesting. Maybe one day you'll get it published then I can go to the store ...

Hi. This was a nice poem. I could totally relate to the feelings expressed. I was just wondering though, what are black sheep? Here are some things I found. You ...

Hey. You have good writing skills, but no offense or anything, this sounds almost exactly like twilight. There are so many parallels. The MC is pale skinned and so is ...

Hi NewHero. It's so pretty. I really like your poems. There's just a few nitpicks. We'll fly On, my love You don't need to capitalize "On". 'Cause President's can't do ...