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  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Chapter 1

    Beautifully written and tragic. Why would Annabel and the other children be locked away from their families? What kind of monsters would do that to a group of children? I’ll ...

    Jul 5, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Realistic Re: Archer's Paradox Chapter 4: Stormy Night

    I think that the hallucination is a good addition to the story. It’s not distracting. I think that the chapter leading up to the news about Cupid doesn’t need any ...

    Jul 4, 2023
  • Poetry » Horror, Dramatic Re: Whispers of the Deep

    It is quite eerie how we know more about Space than the ocean. The ocean is here, on Earth. Space is far away and yet… I think that the midnight ...

    Jul 3, 2023
  • Other » Realistic, Other Re: a_partofmyjourney

    That’s so cute! :) I like how the narrator sees the celebrity crush as someone who will bring them happiness through music, as a fond memory to have. It’s always ...

    Jul 2, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Technology Re: Adventures of an AL Chapter 10.

    Cooper was able to fight the Demigods, but now Cooper is all alone. On top of that, he broke into a million pieces. He could get teleported to somewhere else, ...

    Jul 2, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Narrative Re: Adventures of an AL Beta chapter 9.

    The implants rejected Cooper once, but they won’t reject him again. Or will they? Probably not. He is the supposed Bone God, so he might be fine. Or because he’s ...

    Jun 30, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Narrative Re: The adventures of an AL beta chapter 8.

    Cooper is the Bone God? It hasn’t been confirmed yet, but from what I read, I believe that Cooper is the missing Bone God, reborn as a human. Zach might ...

    Jun 29, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Narrative Re: Adventures of an AL beta chapter 7.

    There’s a new character talking in this chapter. I wonder if the POVS will keep changing. There seems to be more with being a God than Cooper and the other ...

    Jun 28, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Adventures of an AL. Beta chapters 1-6

    So humanity is all gone and cyborgs are the only sources of life left? Interesting. I feel like Cooper was either a warrior, a warlord, or a general in his ...

    Jun 27, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Realistic Re: Archer's Paradox Chapter 3: Misplaced bullseye

    Jay and his Dad’s conversation seems realistic to me. The detail of Jay’s arrows forming a person is well done, showing how much his time as Ghost affected him. It’s ...

    Jun 26, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Realistic Re: Archer's Paradox Chapter 2: The Demon Wakes

    The cozy vibes of the house and the unsettling vibes of the basement don’t feel too fast. A home gives comfort and a basement is prison. Jay’s hesitance to not ...

    Jun 25, 2023
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Romantic Re: Heir of Asratoil - Chapter 1

    So they’re going on an adventure? Cool. I hope all goes well, but one can never be certain in adventures. Is it bad that I already ship Castian with the ...

    Jun 24, 2023
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, Literature Re: Arcadia Incorporated

    That…that was so sad. Dillion is never going to see his family again. Everyone left on the planet would die. Unless they were somehow all able to find the information ...

    Jun 23, 2023
  • Article / Essay » Realistic, Other Re: What is an AL?

    Huh, that’s interesting. I’ll check out the series some time too. The idea of imaginary friends certainly is a curious thing. Why does anyone imagine their friends to look/act a ...

    Jun 22, 2023
  • Short Story » Realistic, Teen Fiction Re: Senior Year with an AL.

    I’d thought it would be a teen-romance story, but that twist just changed everything. When they wake up, it feels like there is something wrong with their world. Something supernaturally ...

    Jun 21, 2023


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