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wow. that was truly amazing. ok, so at first when i read a couple lines i though, uh oh, this is terrible rhyming. by the end i was all, "oh ...

wow i had to read this like three times to get it... sorry. :smt001 yeah um so to me it sounds like a love song which is nice but i ...

hey joce, im so excited for this..... i know it's gonna be a really cool book. ok, now for the critique-- this paticular chapter is really confuzing if you haven't ...

wow, i've read all the lyrics to your songs... and now i really want to hear how they sound!!!! maybe someday when you're a famous song-writer. keep writing. :smt109

hmmmmmm... i didn't really like this, it sounds like the drama at my school. honestly it sounds like a middle schooler talking about her crush. sorta pathetic. if you've gone ...

i thought this poem was well written and very thought-out. i love storms of any kind, as long as i'm safe inside. :D yeah um i think the reason i ...

Now the sun shines bright in the sky To say hello to a new day. add another descriptive word to the last line. if you read it aloud, i think ...

hey lea, i like this version better than the other one! i thinks it's a liitle cliche, but hey, whats new?? :wink: some of the lines were a bit forced, ...

Face to the sky, he let out sardonic laughs. Then he tumbled from the bridge, to avoid all of his gaffes. this was actually the best part for me. knowing ...

joce, this is definately an amazing begining for the sequel to the other book....(un-named) i usually find that the origionals are better than the sequels, but i doubt that is ...

I was a little confuzed at first, I had to re-read it a couple of times. After that I liked it pretty well. "sifts from the skulls of the dead" ...

Cooped up in here-what I call a world of my own, I’m surrounded by the darkness and I’m all alone. Wanting out and to be set free, For there is ...

well ive already read this in its origional script.... but im still amazed by it. ok, joce, i would never say this to your face, but your writing is amazing. ...

ew ew ew ew ew ew ew ew ew ew ew ew ew ew ew ew ew ew hah jk. that was pathetic. but still good effort! if there was ...

wow. uhhh that was a little scattered..... maybe try to bring it together a little more. Spring launched out at them with a series of violent thunder storms. ~Ala spent ...