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Thanks, and I hope you're able to overcome your own internalized homophobia

This might help!

The giraffe's neck doesn't grow in its lifetime. The giraffes that are able to reach the trees survive and reproduce and pass on the trait of long necks to their ...

Just FYI, how life came to be so diverse vs how life or the universe came to be in the first place are two totally separate questions. Evolution (science's answer ...

Let me simplify this: simple sentences are fine and I understand why they're there, but reading them all one after the other is repetitive, and working with sentence structure could ...

You just proved that you didn't understand my comment, actually. You can't assume your readers have seen whatever this was based off of. I'm coming into this without any previous ...

You seem to have misunderstood my comment about sentence structure. think that the simple sentence structure would work okay in just one story, but when you read them all one ...

I guess I still don't understand the italics thing. Why not let the words speak for themselves? It almost feels cheap to tell the reader, "look, these words are more ...

Italics naturally change the way you read something in your head. It's just the way our minds are trained to interpret them.

Thank you!

Do you mean spaces between stanzas? There are a couple of ways to do that, as described in that article I linked you to. I like using shift enter when ...

I'd hate to think there's nothing I can do! I can definitely feel the first stanza you quoted dragging. I think the biggest culprit in this poem is the second ...

Thanks, this definitely helped! Can I ask for clarification on what the "middle section" comprises? I do agree that this got pretty long, especially since the last verse was trying ...

Ok XD

I really like that title suggestion, and I think I'll go with it! Thank you so much for that :D