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Haha! Funny. I love that song. You know, the ducation one? Don't know what it's called. Yeah... that one. Ahhhhh, good times, good times.

Okay. Please double space your work. I can't read that, and nobody else will want to (at least, very few people will want to). Let me know when you fix ...

I was going through my portfolio and finally decided to edit this. Please tell me what you think of it now.

Thankyou for breaking this up. Now, onto the critique. You know those stories about a new kid? How they come to a new school completely freaked out, and by the ...

Thanks for the crit scotty! I've edited this, please crit!

I'm sorry, I couldn't really read it. I sort of skipped bits, but it just didn't draw me in. I just felt... bored. And confused. Does she like this guy ...

Eep! Scary. That was really frightening. I won't be able to sleep for nights! I don't have any technical issues to bring up, but I didn't quite understan the last ...

Aet, I never said dryly wasn't a word, I just don't think you can hink something dryly.

Alright, but you didn't mention him turning off and on again, unless I missed something. Apart from that it seems sound.

I love Doctor Who, but I didn't really get it. Couldn't find any mistakes, just a little confused.

You could ty witing it a different way. Blog, journal, a news report or in a dream.

Well, it's late at night nd I'm tired, so I'm not going to bother giving a good crit until I ake up again, I just want to say tht I ...

Again, short but great. Just one word of advice, I wouldn't recommend just posting and posting and posting. People on here don't like it, and you won't get any reviews. ...

I'm really not in a critiquing modd, so this will be short. I found the dialouge a bit unbelieveable, but I think it's funny. I like what you suggested, but ...

Nice. I liked it. I want to read more, because it was short and a bit rushed.