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This was cool. It's nice to see a light, happy sung here for one, because most aren't. Simple tune and I got it immediately. This song kind of reminded me ...

This was really good. I was able to get the picture before I reached it because it was kind of obvious (what else would have happend), but it was really ...

This is really good. Will you have a recordig by any chance, because I really liked this, and I'd love to hear it sung. I could definetely hear it very ...

This was really good. I'm very interested in WW2, and I beleve this was the bombing of Dresden, when the English got back at the Germans for the Blitz? Correct ...

Welcome to YWS! The first thing I'd like to point out is that we have a two for one reviewing policy. We like it if you would make at least ...

This reads more of a speech than an essay. And I'd like to say one thing: state your position at the beginning of the piece. I hate reading it and ...

I only skimmed the reviews, but it looks like you got some pretty detailed ones, so I'll just tell you what I thought. This piece was very... random. I don't ...

Okay, so your writing wasn't bad. There weren't any mistakes or issues I could spot, but I have a couple of issues with how you wrote it. This piece was ...

I don't have time for a proper critique, so I'll give you my impressions. This story went way too fast. Slowly it down, break it into chapters. You need more ...

I liked this, especially in the beginning. I thought the second bit broke the mood a bit, but it was so good. I can't say a lot about your writing. ...

I agree with the above. It was nice, but it short. I can see this being a prologue, and the story being the longer version of the events. it all ...

I quite liked it. It was short, but it was interesting. What's the lone adjective? I can't spot it, although I'm not good at that sort of thing. Now, onto ...

First of all, welcome to YWS! I hope you have a great time here and find everybody very helpful. Second, here on YWS we have a 2:1 policy. That is ...

Well, you seem to have gotten a lot of detailed critiques on your actual writing (I only skimmed the critiques, so sorry if I repeat anything), so I'll just give ...

I read this before I went to school, but I didn't have time to critique it, so here I am now! I hope I do it justice. Pete drank, and ...