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It is nice, but the publishing part, I doubt that. It is your choice, and this poem is good too but still you should have a better portfolio.

It is just great, I don't have any other comment. This is great, keep it up. And thanks for posting such a nice thing over here.

Nicely written, but read the third last line. If I'm right there is a typing error.

How does it seem now? I've Changed it as first Chapter 1

Well, now when everybody says that is is no good for first chapter and it needs description I think I should also arrange time for that. I will convert this ...

@Everybody, Thanks retro and mystoryline, as you told me that I should explain it a little more I've put some efforts to edit it and had some time on it. ...

Hey, I shall be your reviewer. This is very action pact, which is good. There seems to be no description however, which makes it seem more like a short story, ...

Quite little but cute poem!

Great, it is such a great poem and it is written in first person. I will never forget this one, I will recommend it to all my friends. I never ...

I actually mean to say that this is just too short to be a poem. There should be at least two paragraphs I believe. But for one's interest I would ...

Thanks for the review, I've edited some lines to make this poem read more meaningful, pleas tell me if you think I've improved it. Thank you once again

@Pencilgirl, Hello, I understand what you are saying and I admit that this poem is a lot awkward. I wrote this poem when I was a kid and it was ...

Greetings I'm LastPaladin and firstly don't spit in the face of reviewers, secondly they waste valuable time to review this, so treat them with courtesy. Now on with review. You ...

@Everyone I understand what you people are saying about the first stanza and that I should expand the poem and answer the question and I also know about this but ...

This story seems a little awkward, I like the idea but the way some sentences fit together was just confusing and random. Hope you keep trying and good luck :) ...