cassie17

I really liked this! It was short and flowing, very easy to read. The central thought was nice, but I had to think about it a while to understand it ...

Hi, Kayyo! The moments are passing. The days are dwindling. I've lost who I'm being. I've lost who I WAS, maybe? I've forgotten who I'm becoming. The lies forever surround ...

Hi, grey ghost! Well, personally, I am sort of a haiku addict. I read them all the time and am constantly creating them, even unconsciously. It's hard to make a ...

I always stare at you, when your not looking. "your" should be "you're" as in in you are Laughing, or talking a little louder when you walk by. talking a ...

This is amazing. You captured the true, raw emotion. Great job. But I wish you hadn't because now I feel completely sad. But if you're that talented...well, it's good you're ...

Hi! I really liked it. The rhymes didn't seem forced, and I liked the descriptions. At first, I didn't understand the purpose of the parentheses. What is in the parentheses ...

Wow, I really love this! At first I was skeptical--starting all your sentences with there? But it turned out to be a technique I really enjoyed. I have one comment ...

This was really well written! Like the two above me, making it longer would transform this into a full-fledged essay. However, I'm so amazed what I learned in a few ...

Hi, borntoshop! Okay, overall this piece needs a lot of revision. Your sentences are long, so long, and are desperately in need of some commas, semicolons, and downright full stops. ...

Arcaus--the point of putting up work to be critiqued is just that--to be critiqued. I completely agree with Hannah. There are minor technical flaws in this piece, and the speech ...

I really enjoyed this poem, though, like everything, it can be improved. There are a few spelling mistakes (the first illustrous, for example, should be illustrious as you have it ...

Ha, oh my god, I love like all the ones mentioned... 1984, Book Thief (this book is amazing) and I really really love the A Great and Terrible Beauty Series...this ...

I liked Twilight, New Moon, and Eclipse. I got BD yesterday and despite it's massive bulk (754 pages) I managed it in a little over 18 hours. Let's just say ...

I really enjoyed this poem. I just have a few suggestions: What Heart? You say to me, give me your heart. But why? Why was I placed on this futile ...

I really liked this poem! It seemed so real. I just have a few suggestions: "Everytime when the dawn rises, something dark is always waiting ahead. Somehow, we always surpass ...