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Confusing but well written and interesting. I did not feel that my time was wasted on this story. Well done.

Excellent! I would love to read improvement.

Not feeling it. The villain has no characteristics other than being big and mean, and the victim's a featureless damsel in distress. Felt a pang of excitement when the villain ...

uh is there a plot here somewhere

One thing: "ability change" or "ability TO change"? Also, glad for you. Metaphysical thinking is bad for your sanity. If you're introspective for long enough, you can come out schizophrenic ...

Haha, in this case, wonderful. :3

The second I see "MOTHER DOESN'T LOVE ME WAAH" I automatically think "angsty teen". So, either provide more detail and convince me she really doesn't love you, or don't expect ...

this is so beautiful i wish i could like this more than once

I respectfully disagree with everything you said.

1) Unless you're writing for eagles, please post your works in larger font, so I don't have to gouge my eyes out and press them against the screen to make ...

Is there any point to this other than making me leery about my cereal?

Pretentious and heavy handed. My face was dry.

Pretentious and heavy handed. My face was dry.

I've read Gatsby a while ago, and you're pretty much spot-on with all of your points. Hilarious read, good job!

Hiya, apologies for getting back to this so late. Life has been insane. His perfect head of white hair moved not one centimeter, and his purple robe hung about him ...