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Oh, I am so torn about this piece. Happily torn, I might add. On one hand, there are all the things GreenLight said in his review -- about the exclamation ...

I had written and erased this first paragraph of this review several times now. I feel as though I should say something good about this piece. And it's not as ...

BlueAfrica does bring up good points regarding the plot of this piece. It was also my first intention to point out that the "I promise I'll change for realsies you ...

If I didn't know that ß was a sharp "s", then I would have thought that the great hero of the land was named Peter Flub. It doesn't sound very ...

Interesting. A couple (?) discovers drugs, gets horny, inexplicably turns into a pair of energy beings, and flies off into the vast expanses of space and time. This is what ...

It strikes me as peculiar that this piece puts the little accent mark over Pokémon, but neglects to put periods after many of its sentences and gleefully drops letters from ...

This seems less like a short story and more like a storyboard for an ultra-violent Flash movie. Ever heard of Madness Combat? Check it out, you might like it. There's ...

I thought the grammar was fine here, myself. At any rate I didn't get urges to tear my eyes out, or -- even worse -- stop reading mid-way. The prose ...

insanity, just a word used to sum up all the things they've heard all my deeds, all the blood, all the drugs what i did to those pretty little girls ...

I liked the way the story started and ended with a similar image. Lovely little loop, and the image itself isn't bad. And, as a story can be defined as ...

I liked the way the words turn here -- they remind me somewhat of Lovecraft's writing, though in a more modern setting. There isn't much milling about, the piece goes ...

The only problem I found in this story is -- why do Adarians let their children play near potentially fatal (at but a touch) artifacts? Haven't they heard of WHMIS? ...

You don't spend a significant amount of time on your descriptions and other needless fluff, which is nice. The plot does move forward, things do happen, and generally speaking, I ...

The novelty in this piece works. Stream of consciousness is great for obscuring the identity of the speaker, resulting in an interesting mystery. The idea to break up narrative using ...

The writing in this piece is well-bred and shows an imaginative breadth. All the details of a scene are thought of and expounded on. Thoughts are like doorways into the ...