captain.classy

She open her oval blue eyes, she was quite the beautiful baby. I think it should be "opened." “Now off to bed you too. You have to get up tomorrow, ...

Thank god. Pretty sure God should be capitalized. So, not a lot more happened in this part, since I read everything except the last three paragraphs. I would like to ...

Hmm, okay people have done the nit-picks already, so lets talk about the basics. everything (I am just throwing my thoughts into one area. sorry.) So, I don't really like ...

The cold tile floor was hardly a substitute for the warm bed the young man would have much rather preferred. Now, for one, you put way too many words in ...

I did really like this, don't get me wrong. But, in the beginning, when you were saying all those numbers and scientific names for her, well I found it a ...

Alright, so you have some mistakes in here, but they are very minor. If you just read aloud your story once through you should be good. Characters I really like ...

Demeters! (double demmi) How dare you respond before me? Hehe A friend I have like no other He loves and protects like my mother I think "he loves and protects ...

Haya forest. Only two things bothered me: Two years passed , and Ozean had let the child go to his father, Richard. But now, two years later , Vulkun, Ozean, ...

Mage! I can't believe you set out directions for making the bracelet. You're mighty weird old friend! I found a lot of mistakes, but they have been corrected already. By ...

Let alone why he was even in a forest in the first place. All he could afford to think about now was how was he going to get out. Should ...

Ahh forest I love you! Here I go! “I’ll be your friend,” she said , That captain I met . “I’ve got your back” she told me , And never ...

Christian was on his way home from the general store when he saw a hungry young child dressed in nothing but torn rags. I think you mean 'Christian was.' He ...

Yes, she was big and scary , but she didn't have that same obscene hugeness that the humans did, nor that sense of complete superiority that instills such terror in ...

Hey, so I've only read the first three chapter so far. I don't want to talk about grammar, one, you've already got tons of corrections, and, two, that would take ...

Just a few more minutes, I reminded myself, growing impatient. I'm pretty sure 'just a few more minutes' should be italicized. "So are you excited?" Amanda asked excitedly. Woah! Way ...