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Re: Golden Lights, it's a Terrible Shame
Hey there! Woah this was really good. I really like how the beginning about the expectations. What I like best about it is how you don't directly go out and ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: Lies That Kill
Hi there! This was good. It contained interesting things that caught my attention from the start, and kept it right until the bar scene. I think this is because you ...
May 17, 2011 -
Re: Bloodlust
Hi there! Yeah for a vampire story (I'm not a big fan of them. Like the rest of the world, Twilight ruined if for me. xD) this is really good! ...
May 14, 2011 -
Re: Down To hell
Hi there! Yes, you should definitely continue this. However, if/when you do, you need to change it. I love the first half - it gives great insight to the character ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: Need You Now
Hi there! Aww this is great. I can completely relate to this, and I bet a lot of people can. Until you meet a person that you can see yourself ...
May 9, 2011 -
Re: Zombification
Hi there! Oh, this is so cute! I love every bit of it, from the puns to the heartwarming ending. And the way you describe zombies, sure, I'd probably feel ...
May 7, 2011 -
Re: This post has been deleted.
Hi there! Welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy your stay, and I hope it's going to be a long one because we can always use more writers on the ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Another Obnoxious Blade
Hi there! This is really entertaining! I don't know if it's part of a larger work, with your description at the top of the story, but you can read it ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Unity
Elinor hai! Woaah so sad. And you know what I love? How real you make it seem. You don't swarm me with lots of cliche sob-story quotes, but with a ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Welcoming Richard (TSoaC except)
Hi there! Just a side-note, if this is a novel (which it seems like it is to me) then you should consider putting a 'chapter 1' or just '1' in ...
May 2, 2011 -
Re: Forget Me
Hi there! Yay! Finally someone tackles the emotions on the inside, rather than the outside. Most stories always convey how the character changes on the outside after something like this ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: A Shot of Arrogance (Prologue)
Hi there! I haven't read the rest of your story, so won't be able to tell you if this or your first chapter are better for a beginning. I'll just ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Frienimies
Hi there! This is interesting. It's one of those pieces you read that has you asking, "Is this a true story?" It's so innocent and thoughtful, it seems like one. ...
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: The Haunted Mill
Hi there! Woah, this was intense. I'm a little confused, the name thing and all. I'm guessing your referring to the fact that Channel 29's sister was killed on Highway ...
Apr 20, 2011 -
Re: Whose Work Is It?
Hi there! This is very cute, and has a wonderful moral to it. As I was reading it I thought to myself "What is the plot of this story?" because ...
Apr 18, 2011