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In a warm steppe of the forest night, moonbeam(s) constantly gleams(gleam) through the sleeping gust of the voice of the wind. I clasp my hands, slowly feeling the rhythm of ...

I have tiny, nitpicky things for you. In the description of One, you say 'beaklike.' Just add a hyphen in there. :) That's grammatically it. Personally, I would make it ...

As she sat at the tiny dining room table, contently folding paper, she was olivious (oblivious) to her suroundings(surroundings). All she saw, felt, and heard in those moments were (possibly ...

Stanza two: I understand that you want the separation on every line with the commas, but you can just start a new line. That's what I would do here. Stanza ...

I like the description, but, other than the fact that she is a dreamer/artist kind of person, we don't know much about her. Why doesn't she have friends? And you ...

In the second paragraph, "her's and her's alone" should be "hers and hers alone." Directly before you know of the new maidservant: "Ariel's her lips" should be "(Ariel's or her) ...

This is definitely an interesting poem. You have some strange punctuation going on. "Running, screaming, laughing(comma vs. period) Clawing at the noise(comma or period, not semi colon) Blood drips(Co

This is adorable! Fourth stanza: Did you mean to capitalize time? "Still 'too' sluggish" Sixth stanza: "Still 'too' busy" Stanza nine: "Wednesday, 'week's' half gone." "Get home 'tired.'" I think ...

I really like this. I just enjoy poetry. I know that the point of poetry is sometimes to be enigmatic, but you didn't specify a tipping point for your character. ...

I like the impression I've gotten from this snippet. Not going into detail definitely intrigues a reader, wants them to continue, discover just exactly what the twelve figures are. Grammatical ...