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Thanks guys! I will work on that cliche ending though, Nate, ta - and I'd be honoured if you read it to those kids :D Thanks again for the input, ...

You are most welcome, penny :) I like dashes. Pauses without full-stops, changes of ideas, hyphens...lovely dashes LOL. By the way, kudos on the title, too - I love it!

I changed particular to boundless...dunno if it works any better though. Gah! I love the poem but I cant seem to...those last few lines...[wrestles with poem, which doesnt seem to ...

I confess, I do love the word honey. Sweet and thick and yummy! You'll probably notice I reuse ideas and impressions because they go with so much in my mind ...

I kinda like it. Its a bit short, but it puts into words precisely something I often feel. Well done. A nice little piece, very succinctly put.

Thanks for the support guys, but seriously, I truly didnt like it anyway. I agree with Tess about rhyming poems. Theyre aggravating. So I will rewrite this one and make ...

LMAO its so funny you should say that, because originally it WAS on two lines, but later I thought ppl might not like the two-word line ("by you") so I ...

Hehe it is a bit like that isnt it? :oops: Like I said, I was just messing - trying to get the brain working. I thought it was kind of ...

"Ripples" is good...Thanks for your suggestions. I used "Indigo" when I posted this on Fiction Press, which seemed to go down well. I'll have to keep thinking though, as I ...

Thanks for your reviews guys! I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Like I said, its one of my favourites. And, Firestarter, I'll tell you a secret...I've never even tasted wine ...

Thanks for the advice guys! So you reckon it should read something like this...? A Drop of Water I am a drop of water Life is my window And I ...

Thanks for your comments, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Does anyone have any title suggestions? I think "Midnight Swim" is kinda mundane but I was in a hurry at the ...