This is one of my favourite (rhyming) poem's I've written and I'd appreciate any hints on how to improve it. Its still in raw, just-as-it-was-written form, so I know there has to be something I can polish...please let me know what you think.
Summer Wine
The tang of morning on my tongue;
A sweet bouquet of paradise -
The shadows ebb before the sun
The sky has turned to cobalt ice.
Across the water, light comes dancing
Caught on rising waves of blue,
The brilliant green of grass - entrancing
A world alight, refreshed and new.
The hint of flowers in the air,
The cream, the pink-red strawberries;
The sound of "Greensleeves" drifting there
above the hum of honey bees.
The world has stopped, half closed its eyes
A moment, bottled, caught in time
All this, I taste, and more besides
As I drink deep of summer wine.
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Hello, Keep here! I know this work was posted a very long time ago. I know I shouldn't be reviewing it because it'll annoy someone. But I also know that this deserves a like, and to be once again brought up! I've started this thing I called "Review Old Works Project," and your work definitely needs to be a part of it. This poem rolled off the tongue and was magnificent in every single way! Everything was properly punctuated and capitalized and the rhyme scheme was perfecto! I'd love to look back at some more of your old works and bring them up once again for YWS to see. Toodles!
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I'm not on YWS much anymore (I no longer qualify as a "young" writer lol), but it's always nice to hear from people that they like my old stuff 
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Past and present everywhere
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i hate it when people take the last phrase, snatch a few words from it and make it the title. but it fits, so i can't complain
beautiful imagery, rhyme & rhythm
That piece of poetry was very descriptive....
... I really enjoyed the bit about the honey bees!
Thanks for your reviews guys! I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Like I said, its one of my favourites. And, Firestarter, I'll tell you a secret...I've never even tasted wine (I'm 17) LOL, but I'm sure I wouldnt like it much. Lets pretend its grape juice or Ribena instead hehe.
Wow! That was amazing. I bow to your poetic creativity. Though wine tastes disgusting...maybe it's my inexperienced 16 year old tongue.
I really can't suggest much. Just..celebrate your talent by drinking some wine.
nice!
I agree, can't find anything worth changing! It is really nice in winter here, as it reminds us of summer.
Definately enjoyed it.. it sounded great to me. Cannot think of anything that I would change?