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Thanks Galatea - I've made some alterations as per your suggestion and I think I like it much better now :) 'daddy's plastic' is definitely stronger and I reckon it ...

I definitely think this is an improvement. Your second stanza fits nicely with the first and 'takes over' is a good replacement for 'washes over'. Overall, a great effort, definitely ...

Thanks convintojm, I'm glad you liked it. I never really noticed at the time that I said 'mothers money' - it just seemed natural. But now that I reread it ...

Thanks Firestarter, I particularly enjoyed this poem coz the topic was kind of unusual for me :). Glad you enjoyed it.

Yes, exactly Crysi! Precisely what I mean to imply! [bows sweepingly] My work here is done :lol:

Thank you Crysi. I'm particularly fond of this poem myself, because its so absurd (most of my work is usually straightforward - this is a bit more subtle). I suppose ...

Thank you Firestarter :) (btw, your current avatar is very appropriate, lol)

Thanks - I'm glad you liked it :) I was hoping to give it a feeling of tension so its good that you saw that. Thanks again for your reviews, ...

Thanks everyone...this is my favourite poem out of all the poems I've written so far. So I'm glad you like it just as much! :D Cheers, ~bubble 8)

Thanks both of you glad you liked it, I've taken some of your advice re: editing, Galatea, ta.

Wow, guys, thanks, I'm really glad you like it so much. :oops: I'm beginning to be quite fond of this poem, LMAO. Cheers! 8)

I loved it too. It seems to end a bit abruptly IMHO, but it is definitely effective like that. Nice concept here. I look forward to seeing some more of ...

Yeah, what they said LOL. This is a great little piece. I like the repetition of certain word forms and the way the ideas seem to go together and yet ...

Thanks guys -- glad you liked it. I love the Emperors New Groove too, even though technically I'm too old for cartoons [looks around furtively] Shhh! :shock:

Cheers, CarsandGuitars - I changed the title now lol s ohpefully it wont put ppl off anymore. Ta for the review. :D