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Hi jujubean05, welcome to YWS! Re: your poem. To be honest, it didn't really grab me. I appreciate the sentiment and you've done a good job with the rhyming, but ...

Hi paperhearts, welcome to YWS! Re: your poem. I like the choice of genre - prose poems are really fun to read, but they don't seem to be very popular ...

Oh, lovely. I love the way you've layered the meaning of the deadheads and connected it with the gardener's own aging process. Gorgeous. I had a problem with "tendons" in ...

Hi TL G-Wooster, Here's the review you requested :) I'm kind of two minds when it comes to this poem (ha, that's actually kind of ironic...). On the one hand, ...

Hi personalinsanity, Welcome to YWS! Don't forget to leave some reviews and get to know the other members; I'm sure they'll be pleased to meet you :) Re: your poem ...

Hi amandajo, Welcome to YWS! Don't forget to leave some reviews and get to know the other members; I'm sure they'll be pleased to meet you :) Re: your poem, ...

Hi HorseradishCares, Welcome to YWS! Always nice to see a new 'face' on the forums :) Re: your poem, well, wow. That was kind of bizarre. The rhyme scheme is ...

Hi kingolions, Firstly, I have to say that I appreciate how difficult it can be to write a happy poem. Poetry seems to lend itself much better to sadness and ...

Hi Rosey Unicorn, Here's the review you requested :) To be honest, I saw this poem yesterday but didn't comment on it, mostly because there really isn't much I can ...

Hi personalinsanity, Welcome to YWS! Don't forget to leave some reviews and get acquainted with the other members; I'm sure they'll be pleased to meet you! Re: your poem - ...

Hi KaitelynMiller, I can't really add much to what Jasmine Hart has said, except that I agree: the rhyme comes across as quite forced and your rhythm is choppy, so ...

Hi Demeter, I have to agree with Blink - this has potential, but at the moment it feels like a collection of images, held together by a story that's just ...

Hi Kyllorac, Here's the review you requested :) First, I have to gush over how much I enjoyed this. Greek mythology (and poetry which alludes to it) makes me very ...

Hi Kyllorac, Here's the review you requested :) To begin with, there are a lot of things I like about this poem. I love "a susurrant thought," "dreams that spiral, ...

Hi xjpalladinix, Welcome to YWS! Don't forget to leave some reviews and get acquainted with the other members; I'm sure they'll be pleased to meet you! Re: your poem, I ...