Young Writers Society

This was really... deep. And the imagery was...wow. This kind of reminded me of Dante's Inferno, the way it is a story in the form of a poem... with one ...

This is beautiful. I loved it. Seriously. Wow. The only nitpick I have is your lack of punctuation. It makes the poem kind of confusing when there is none. So, ...

I liked this alot, especially the ending. But I do have a few suggestions to help with the rhythm. For example, on the second line, I would insert something like ...

I liked this.. I want to point out, however, that you should probably stick to using black "ink". This makes your work look more professional and worth reading. Also, I ...

oh wow. This was seriously awesome! I loved it. And though I know you posted this poem in hopes of a helpful review, I can't really give you one as ...

oh wow. This is some seriously epic stuff here. I can't believe no one's commented yet! ok, so anyways, I only have ONE nitpick =) I pray my lungs can ...

hello there :) crits are in bold The best of the best have sleepless nights ; They can’t evade his grip , so tight (took out the "just". kinda helps ...

hello there :) I liked the second poem especially... it was sweet. The only thing I disagree with is your non-use of punctuation. If you don't understand where to put ...

hello there =) I really liked your poem. It flows perfectly, seriously- awesome rhythm =) I just have one little nitpick- line one: The rage it builds; it grows in ...

This was seriously funny :D There was hardly anything wrong at all, except a few comma mistakes (of which I'm too lazy to point out right now... sorry =P but ...

I really liked this, and I liked that kept the rhyme instead of free verse. It's one of the things that make this particular poem interesting. haha I liked the ...

hello :) I liked this poem alot. I only have a few nitpicks, but before I start, I love your first two stanzas! lol ok, anyways. first nitpick: show me ...

hi there :) nice poem, but on to the review: I am for you an illusion – Without appearance; without shape, Unseen and forgotten and frozen in time Hidden within ...

Ooh, I really liked this! It was really neat :) anyways, it flowed really well and everything, but something you might add is what the fire and ice represent? It ...

this was nice, It brought something new here, and was really quite refreshing. See the moon from near Wander without fear This is just a thought, but "from near" might ...