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Thank-you! And yes, i thought about that when writing it.

I really like it too! Very creative and random...made me laugh. I agree with Lilly when it jumped around abit, but i liked it anyway. Well done! :D

I like this! It kind of reminds me of Avatar (have you heard of that?) I want to see what happens next!

WOW! *speechless* That was....amazing! You really captured the pain of this girl. And i love the way you ended it, that last line about her not smiling, just made me ...

Thank-you both for commenting! Ziggie - Okay thank-you! I will go back through and change things. This is why i love other people reading it, i like it when people ...

I don't really get this?? Maybe i'll read it again.. And guess what?!!?1 My name is Carly :O Good choice of names! :D!

Thank-you! I will go through and check my story over again. VioletJune- No, i am not from America. Why is that?

I'm not a poet, but this was really good!! I liked it very much! It connected with the girls fear, and it explained things well! Awesome!

hahahahhahaha LOL! Nice! I do agree with everyone else too. Rap verse! Very easy to read. :D

Very well written, and well thought out! You are very good at this, and it sounds like you've had some expierence??? I liked it. Very very very true! Good work.

hahahahhaha LOVE IT!! :D Awesome twist at the end! Wasn't what i was expecting!

Just btw, Peyton was going to be a girl.

Just btw, Peyton was going to be a girl.

Just btw, Peyton was going to be a girl.

Hi :D Thank-you for commenting and sharing your opinions on my story. I very much apprecitate it! I'm not being lazy because i left my mistakes, it is unfinished is ...