bloodyblackrose

hmm. mediocre. you make it seem as if there's only two ways to live: abide by the system or be an outcast. your poem makes it sound as if being ...

okay so i have almost no idea what this poem is about. i got the helen of troy allusion. the first part made me think maybe vampires? lol. second and ...

this is a beautiful poem. the imagery is absolutely amazing. yeah, it is a typical rhyme scheme but it fits. i think this poem would be really cool as a ...

favorite lines: From the earth, myself I must scrape, I hope my death is on your plate. a bit confusing, but that might just be because its been a long ...

i completely relate to this poem. there isn't very much imagery but that's okay by me because sometimes poems without imagery are refreshing. it keeps you from having to analyze ...

right so, you've edited this since i last read it :) the only problem i saw was grammatical: putting her under much to deep. ((putting her under much too deep.)) ...

i definitely thought the last stanza was the best. "Till the morning dawn breaks, and his soul flees his dead vessel I find myself alone in an angel's embrace her ...

you definitly need to continue this poem. it is amazing so far, and i dont see anything wrong with it. i love that she is in an 'ocean of hate'. ...

i really liked this poem. despite a few grammatical errors and typos it was pretty good. but the beginning was a bit confusing because it wasnt clearly specified what "disappeared" ...

i like your title. it draws the reader in. and the way you have your poem centered rather than just aligned left like most are. its creative. and i like ...

passionate. i thought it had a lot of heart and longing in it. it was obvious to me that this is something you really want, and the poem portrayed that. ...

the whole 'i miss you, i need you' thing was a little annoying. but i still think you should repeat it, maybe just not as much. and i loved this ...

i liked it. up until she got into the argument with her mother it was a bit boring, but the argument was something that sounded real. it didnt seem like ...

i loved this poem. other than a few grammatical errors, i thought it was very well-written. and yeah, maybe it is a little confusing, but that's the whole idea. the ...

i dont know what firestarter's problem is, i thought it was a beautiful poem. i loved the rhyme scheme, and i didnt think it was messy at all. disregard all ...