bloodybelle01

I see you have broken this up into one chapter within one post, it will be much more manageable for readers and you will get more specific feedback if you ...

I was slightly confused reading this... a trend I see looking at the other reviews on this piece. Actually, I am really, really, really confused. Also, this piece didn't have ...

This was nice, the descriptions and emotions were very enjoyable to read. This is a very interesting piece and very relatable (that's a word- I don't know why Google spell-check ...

I haven't read any of the other chapters in this book but this is long overdue for a review, so why not? The 'Guildless' concept reminds me a bit of ...

I'm afraid I could not get into your story. This doesn't mean it isn't good it just isn't something I enjoy reading... but I will review what I did read. ...

Hello, I have mixed feelings about this piece- I liked it and I disliked it, for various reasons. Let's start with what I did like, shall we? I loved your ...

This was quite interesting but your opening paragraph is a bit off-putting. I don't think you really need it. You explored some great concepts but I think this could do ...

I haven't read the previous four chapters of this but after reading this I will definitely go back and do so. This was amazing (btw. great choice of title- that ...

I love the metaphors throughout this piece, they help me visualise what you are talking about. The rhyming also flows nicely! My favourite part was probably 'I am the highest ...

I like this, very refective! You have some excellent vocabulary and some wonderful analogies/metaphors. (I especially love 'I was decaying, I was eating myself alive, tearing the flesh from the ...

You have an interesting story idea should definitely pursue it! Criticisms: 1. As you are writing in past tense ‘And if both of those fail, he still has his fists, ...

I loved this! The opening stanza is especially lovely! I like the repetition of 'you spread' in the first two lines, it's very effective at sets a nice atmosphere. I ...

I like this... it's a good point, too... (that saying is messed up, whilst patience is certainly a virtue nothing will happen to someone who doesn't go an make it ...

My question to you is.... there is nothing here except ' ~~ ' Is that intentional? If it is, this should not be put in 'Short Story'. I shall critique ...

Love your quote :) This is a wonderfully exciting prologue and definitely hooking! You have some wonderful descriptions. I like how you end it as a dream... it seemed very ...