blackwings_angel

Yo dude.... just to let you know the first time people critize this stuff on YWS it seems really harsh but have no fear it doesn't get ANY better!!! Fortunetly ...

okay dude ther was alot wrong with this. First I'll go over some opionions {I know that's spelled wrong but I really don't care right now) 1:Okay who acts as ...

I liked this. I found well scanning through pieces, so if your piece has already been graded let us know. I did notice you seemed to go in reverse. Even ...

I quickly skimmed over this, I had to get off momentarily, but i noticed there was hardly any punctation marks. You might want to find some way to weave the ...

Alright Kinsley since your a new member first I'll welcome you to YWS! Second, present tense {no offense} is a terrible way to right fantasy. trust me i write quite ...

I unfortunetly don't get a few parts in it. if its cuz im just stupid let me know. what does the ciggarette smoke have to do with anything? If the ...

I am scribbling all over your piece of poetry :twisted: mwhahahahahahahahahahahahah ha ha BLLPT No really i AM scribbling all over it. I liked it but it made my head ...

Hey anthony its matt. Oh yeha right your sitting right next to me. :? Oh well. I liked the story. And during our walk i heard what is really is ...

This is wicked cool. It unfortunetly would never happen, disney hasn't made anything have a sad ending in a while. If this were to be a disney picture It wouldn't ...

I read the whole thing, it took me quite a while. I really like the connections you made. Myra seems as though to make a great princess, not one of ...

i like it alot their were a few spelling errors, reread it and you will see them. I just have a few questions -Isn't Conan a little young to be ...

I really liked it full of emotion th eonly thing I have to comment on is spelling errors, just little mistakes like claming instead of calming and bead instead of ...

nice very lyric make it longer and hey it maybe a top 10 on the charts. then ew can pop the chapagne and... wait :cry: oh yeah the likwid monkez ...

alright well it was okay. First of You kind of had a info dump about joshes apearance spread the information out a little we don't need an entire description in ...

alright danny here we go i agree with anthony yeah the last stanza would make a good book but yeah you may not want this under poetry it hardly rhymes ...