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Firstly, wow. this was really good. i feel like it got better as it went on because the rhythm was more consistent. i especially love the line.... 'As the minutes ...

Firstly, very well done. it gets straight to the point which is good. i especially love the last stanza as it sums everything up with successful rhyming too. i felt ...

Firstly this is especially cool because i have never read anything like it. The rhyming is generally good and i especially like the second stanza. This is a fun poem ...

this is really good. captured the reader instantly and held many features that are really succesful. including... 'For the first time in a while I smiled today' this is a ...

WOW! i really enjoyed reading this. Firstly, its original and i have not come across anything like it before! The title immediately brought me in because i am keen on ...

firstly, this is really cool. The rhythm is consistent and therefore makes the poem easier to read and keep up with. i would say that you may want to think ...

Firstly charlie this is awesome!! the rhyming was great and really successful (not unnecesary like some ppl seem to think) you capture a lot of mood and illustrate the whole ...

Firstly well done. There are many aspects of this that were really good, especially the first section. It immediately draws you in. With the first bit, I'd just like to ...

Firstly, this is really really good! I do think i read your last one and this is so so good!! Theres a few points i would still like to make... ...

Firstly, Well done. THis was a really interesting poem to read and captured a lot of emotion :) i picked out a few things that may help... Firstly, in the ...

Firstly , it is not bad at all! Have more faith in your work. Its actaully very good! You have created a moving atmosphere and got straight to the point ...

Firstly, i think that it is actually very difficult to write in 1st person because of the constant use of 'I'. i praise the fact that, in most circumstances. you ...

Firstly I am writing this as a reader and not a mate! hehe. I love this story and especially the first few lines. You instantly get the reader involved and ...

this is very well written and gets straight to the point which i like a lot. there are a few things i would point out though if i may... Firstly, ...

This is a very successfully written poem with many good points. Good job I would suggest a few things, that if u choose to make note of, might possibly help... ...