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Re: Let's talk about Sex
Hey Bee! I'm mainly doing a quick comment on this because I see a lot of criticism here, and by the look of your replies I don't think you're taking ...
Jan 10, 2014 -
Re: Birds of War
Hey Messenger! Alright, time to venture into the shady world of pirates, swords and vast oceans. This will be the first time I'll review something by you, which will be ...
Jan 8, 2014 -
Re: Saltwater Wounds - Chapter One
Hey Sarah! Despite not having too much too comment on or improve with this piece, I still felt I had to do a quick review. And mainly hand out some ...
Jan 7, 2014 -
Re: French Hens and the Spirit (Part 3 Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Hey Deanie! I'm sorry I haven't paid mind to this or read through it sooner, as when I first saw it, it didn't catch my attention. And as I read ...
Jan 6, 2014 -
Re: Guardianship Prologue: The Throne
Hey Segreto! Alright, time for some sword and sorcery fiction. I have several things to comment on, so I'll just jump right to it. I see you wrote this as ...
Jan 4, 2014 -
Re: Stargazing in Bali. (Edited as of 16/01)
Hey Harrington! This short story is pretty fantastic, and there's not much I could comment on and criticize, but I'll quickly write up what I thought about it. First off, ...
Jan 4, 2014 -
Re: Ignore
Hey Aurora! First off, welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy yourself here. Now, writing in 1st person is something quite tricky to do and I'd like to see it ...
Jan 4, 2014 -
Re: Otherworldly: Prologue
Hey Cha! A bit late, but welcome to YWS! You seem to have settled in fine. I usually don't comment on works where I have very little to say, but ...
Dec 31, 2013 -
Re: first time using this site
Hey Lexia! Welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy yourself here, it's a great place for learning. First off, I should hand out the honorary 'Worst title' award, which I ...
Dec 31, 2013 -
Re: Honeymoon in Mars - Episode1(The Red future)
Hey Rikki! First off, a somewhat belated welcome to YWS. I hope you've found yourself at home here. Now, I obviously missed this and all your other chapters when you ...
Dec 31, 2013 -
Re: The Edge of the Petals - Chapter 1
Hey Lateritic! I'll start off with saying the title of your novel is great! It's what drew me to reading this first chapter. However, your writing, grammar and storytelling needs ...
Dec 30, 2013 -
Re: Guardians
Hey Meddle! First off, welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy yourself here. Now, I love Science fiction, it's my favorite genre. So I had to check out your short ...
Dec 18, 2013 -
Re: Fear of the Fall
Hey dbrick! I'll just be doing a quick review here, I don't have too much to comment on. But there is one big issue, namely: This work is an entire ...
Nov 7, 2013 -
Re: DON'T PANIC
Hey Confetti! Hitchhikers Guide to the Galaxy. That is all. Okay, I also really like the idea behind poems like this. But they are so hard to intrepid, so maybe ...
Nov 7, 2013 -
Re: The Quantum Mind: Chapter 1
Hey Buggie! I'm here to bug you. With a review. First off, welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here. I was drawn in by the title of your ...
Nov 3, 2013