birchermuesli

Every time I close my eyes Images ripple , full of lies (You need some sort of breaking punctuation here - perhaps a dash?) A whisper so silent, a siren's ...

Oh wow. Wow, wow. That was fantastic. You seem to have a gift in being able to portray scenes from the point of view of young children - the juvenile ...

Ooh, true story, eh? :P I'd love to see how it turns out! So first of all, great start. I really enjoyed your writing - it's quite light and easy ...

My gosh, this is amazing. I'm really in a rush to get somewhere, so I'll review properly later - I don't have enough time to type up all that I ...

This is short, sweet and subtle in its message. It was very enjoyable to read. :) Just a couple of quick nit-picking: Walking down the line What's gonna be my ...

This was a very descriptive piece, and quite effective at times. The only advice I would have is to minimise the number of times you use one or two word ...

Oh my gosh. Curse you, why do you write so well?! :P This has got to be one of the best poems I've read. Taking out all the capitilisations was ...

I really liked this! :) I think the extensive use of enjambment when you cut your sentences into several lines/stanzas really adds to the whole 'trash' concept of the poem. ...

This was very entertaining to read, however it would be great if you could add in more details to give a more accurate description of the setting, the characters and ...

This was amazing. Amazing, amazing. I loved the idea of the moon hanging by a string; it was such an original thought on your part. :) Also, I think I ...

This was great! I wish you had written a little more so I could get a more detailed picture of what you were trying to convey, but that's all okay ...

Wow, this was great! I couldn't really understand what you were trying to convey, however you gave a very nice visual image for the readers. At times it seemed a ...