belladonna

Hello! I think your story is very lovely, though there are some errors. In the first paragraph, end of second line, it should be "respectful" instead of "respected." Like CreativelyWritten, ...

Hey, Lukas here for a review. This is a very lovely piece, but I feel like it would flow better if you wrote "No more OF me to hate," and ...

Wow. This is definitely an entertaining read! Especially since I live in an area where turtles are often found. The medieval language has a stark contrast with the end of ...

Hey! Lukas here for a review, and I have to say that you have quite the plot going on here. There are a couple mistakes, such as "where his whereabouts" ...

Hey, this is an interesting poem! I have to agree with Mahvash on the adore/adored thing. Maybe it should be "I asked myself, "is it because I was not Really ...

Whoa. This is very good and I'm glad that you aren't blaming yourself over this total jerk leaving you. The tone is consistent and the progression is smooth. My only ...

This is a very interesting poem. It evokes a sense of sad, dirty loneliness. Definitely not the clean cut type of loneliness. I find the use of rhyme to be ...

Hey! This is pretty good for a first attempt, though it is a bit on the short side. I feel like it would work better as "Ever lasting" rather than ...

This seems very well written, though a bit confusing. One can assume , though, that it would be less confusing should one read the entire book. It definitely was a ...

This is a very vibrant account, although there are various grammatical mistakes. Many phrases, such as rainbow-colored and thin-out, do not need to be hyphenated. Ellipses generally have only three ...

This is a very real and brilliant piece. It feels like you really put a lot of thought and emotion into it. The anonymity of it all just highlights this ...

Wow. Words can hardly express how impressed I am. This is a very emotion heavy piece. Living in a community with a large native american population, it makes me sad ...

This is really amazing. All in all, it flows very naturally and ends on a wonderfully forlorn note. I felt as though I was reading a classic, something that will ...