ballerina13

Hello! First off, I just want to say how touching this poem was. It really was lovely. But I do feel that it could have used a bit more imagery ...

Hello! This poem was great. It was brilliantly written and it made me think as well. Truth be told, it was amazing, actually. :) The emotion in it and the ...

Hello! So far, I am loving this story line. It is great and the way you started off with dialogue hooked me right away. But some of the wording confused ...

Hello! This was a great poem. I loved it. It emoted the pre-wedding jitters that everyone faces so well. The way that you put dialogue in didn't distract from the ...

Hello! Alright, so I think that this could be a nice section of the story when and if you expand on it. So, factually, I can't really give much of ...

Hello! Alrighty so, I think that the concept is a good idea- I've never read a book about 9/11 so this will be interesting. I think that this story could ...

Hello! I liked this poem. It was very sweet and simple but showed an insight about the character. I do have some corrections though. My critiques/ comments will be on ...

Hello! This poem was amazing. I loved the imagery that you put in it. The end line is great in a tragic sort of way, if you know what I ...

Hi! So this was a very short story and everything went at a very rapid pace. The plot is interesting and could have potential if it was expanded on. The ...

Hello! This was really good. I enjoyed it very much. The whole idea of it is intruiging. I liked the flow and tone set right away. The word choice and ...

Hello! This was interesting. The history of the Civil War is great. I love the Civil War era. But, I do feel that it was confusing. The poem-esque beginning was ...

Wow! This was great. There was such imagery and emotion within the words. It was so sweet and heart-breaking. I loved it. Your poem was something that I could see ...

This was very short and did not seem to tell us anything about the story. Describe things, people, the room, the dog, why is he called Solace? Who is Jacob? ...

Hello! And welcome to YWS. As Evi has already mentioned the mechanics of your piece, I will shy away from them. This was really good. It was sweet, funny and ...

This was good. I like that you created and a cliff hanger. It made me want to read more. I am interesting in where this story it going to go; ...