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You still might want to change the word so it's not so confounded. Nooooooo..... It's a lovely word; besides, good writing should stretch the capabilities of the reader - don't ...

It doesn't quite feel like it ends. It comes to this sort of semi-conclusion, but doesn't really conclude anything, if you know what I mean: it's finish is an "if" ...

Well that's bloody creepy, in a very literal sense XD Literary, too: it certainly strikes the tone you're going for, right on the head. Large and lasting kudos. Only thought ...

It is an interesting book, and I'd say well written as well: there are occasions where the characters seem just a little too stereotypical for their own good, but apart ...

Your poems seem to have a nasty thing for going uncommented upon, probably because there's so many of them and they're all very difficult to critique. Two good things, really, ...

Interesting: my only comment (I'm afraid I can't really shoot at your grammar and syntax) is that you focus a lot on your Grandma's enthusiam and day-to-day skills, but maybe ...

The first line reminds me of a song by Keane. It's good, I like your one-line way of starting poems. Leaves crinkling underneath my yielding broom as I fight the ...

Um... I think you might have missed the point there, jiggy old chap - read the rest of the poem carefully. My only complaint is the punctuation of the final ...

Ah, the joys of praise with no critique! Time to right that :P Well, overall a very good piece. My problem is, you seem to oscillate between excellent imagery and ...

Sadly, Snoink m'dear, I'm with Silver on this one; besides, this isn't a list poem! In a list-style, each line has to stand absolutely alone: your last two lines are ...

Good, good: there are just a couple of things. It needs punctuation if it's honestly going to be a poem - when you read it out loud (especially considering it's ...

... First off, you write with maturity far above your age. I'm very impressed. Seconly, you have a love-hate relationship with punctuation. You use it well within the lines, but ...

Why, oh why must such a brilliant poet forget the punctuation? You know what to do - get those commas, colons, semi-colons etc IN. Your rhythm is pretty good, though ...

"The sun shines now." The = 1 sun = 1 shines = 1 now = 1 --------- total = 4 To be honest, I think giving you an extra syllable ...

Okydoky. Starting with the typos: "Im" in the second line should be "I'm"; "cant" in the fourth line should be "can't"; "im" in the seventh line should be "I'm"; "cant" ...