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I like the flow of your poem. It doesn't sound forced and it feels natural. It's a really nice piece. You should keep up the good work! I have to ...

This is a nice poem but to tell you the truth, it seemed plain. My suggestion would be to add some metaphors, add some more poetic words. This is a ...

I have to agree with those who posted before me that you should spell check. Also, I spotted that there were some misplaced/dangling modifiers, if you could edit these errors, ...

This is actually a very entertaining poem, I like how you made the tune light and upbeat! On my part, I have to point out the lack of punctuations, I'm ...

I like this poem, the content is amazing. it can actually make the reader stop and think about what happens when there is a war.. It serves as an eye ...

Since the ones who posted before me seemed to have sighted all the errors, I'm going to do the praising part. I love your poem! It was able to capture ...

This is a really interesting letter. Emotions are abound, makes me think that this comes from a personal experience. I have to agree with Rigel though about that one line ...

I enjoyed reading this! This is a really interesting story. For my suggestion.. it's almost the same as canislupis's. Though, I'm going to add that you should make this as ...

The poem's lovely! but even so, I have to agree with Ani's corrections and Someguy's conclusion.. Here are some of my suggestions: 1. The tree line above leaving shadow below. ...

This story kind of reminded me of a scene I've read in Twilight.. the meadow scene to be exact.. Anyway, I think that this is a lovely story! One thing ...

Hello there! I saw you say that you posted your work and so I went to have a look :D I noticed these errors: Where there is she doesn't care, ...

I have to agree with what everyone above said. The story itself is promising especially the beginning but the grammatical errors ruined it. Also, I think that somewhere in the ...

I like this story. It's interesting! I have to agree with the others that this piece of work has potential! There's nothing much that I can critique since I've only ...

I would have to agree with the posters before me. Your story is interesting but it's like you're just narrating it. We can't see how the characters interact with each ...