Young Writers Society

Most of it, I liked. I love the last line, because it's exactly how I feel about somebody I know. Great work!

I liked it, but it was sooooo corny. I heard a million of these kind of poems in my lifetime. If you really had gave it some thought, it would have been a winner. Good luck and hope to read some more.

i agree with the comment about shivers. Its very cliche at this point. However, for the rest of the poem is well written i love how you bring it to the table. I can relate too so i enjoyed reading. thank you.

This is a nice poem but to tell you the truth, it seemed plain. My suggestion would be to add some metaphors, add some more poetic words. This is a nice poem, you don't have to rewrite the whole poem, just add a little more how should I put this? spice? I hope that my suggestion will help! Keep on writing!

It gave me a good feeling. Made me feel happy- yet sad( hmmm?). I liked it.


'Send shivers up my spine' I've seen this way too many times- maybe you can shift it towards a unique style of your own? Maybe?

Besides that pretty damn awsome.