Winter Road

azure wrote:I like the flow of your poem. It doesn't sound forced and it feels natural. It's a really nice piece. You should keep up the good work!

I have to agree with adriangarcia that your poem does remind me of Robert Frost. Have you heard of the poem The Road Not Taken? It's by Robert Frost. You should read it, it's really good.

Regarding the length of your poem.. I think it's okay. Some people might prefer longer poems but I suggest that you stick to the length you're more comfortable in. There's no point in forcing yourself to make a long poem which will sound forced but that's just me Good luck on your writing!

As to your question regarding your Pen name... It's nice Though if you want suggestions, you can use your name's initials too

lordgluzman wrote:It was really nice and good. The words and the rhyming were awsome! I dont know if you have grammer mestakes but I couldnt fined them.

Just to give you a hint. Try to write long poems. It will improve your lazyness, talents of poem, songs, and storys. I promise + it will be more interesting!

But I loved your poem, Great Job

KaryRyze wrote:Wonderfully written. It seemed a little off in one or two lines, like an extra syllable, but that could just be me. xD I have no idea who Robert Frost is, but you must be pretty good to compare to him.

Wonderfully written. It seemed a little off in one or two lines, like an extra syllable, but that could just be me. xD I have no idea who Robert Frost is, but you must be pretty good to compare to him.

I like the flow of your poem. It doesn't sound forced and it feels natural. It's a really nice piece. You should keep up the good work!

I have to agree with adriangarcia that your poem does remind me of Robert Frost. Have you heard of the poem The Road Not Taken? It's by Robert Frost. You should read it, it's really good.

Regarding the length of your poem.. I think it's okay. Some people might prefer longer poems but I suggest that you stick to the length you're more comfortable in. There's no point in forcing yourself to make a long poem which will sound forced but that's just me Good luck on your writing!

As to your question regarding your Pen name... It's nice Though if you want suggestions, you can use your name's initials too

It was really nice and good. The words and the rhyming were awsome! I dont know if you have grammer mestakes but I couldnt fined them.

Just to give you a hint. Try to write long poems. It will improve your lazyness, talents of poem, songs, and storys. I promise + it will be more interesting!

But I loved your poem, Great Job

StolenHearts. wrote:Well first off you must do two reviews when submitting a piece, just thought I'd inform you since you haven't done any reviews. I really liked this it was full of meaning and flowed really good.

How cold and gray the world may seem,
Down the road less traveled we’re rarely seen.

To go down a road that never ends,
Forever searching for curving bends.

The frozen snow nips at my feet.
And the whole world seems very bleak.

Things are now shells of what they once were.
And the once blue sky begins to blur.--I really liked this part

Things were once innocent, I’m sure you can tell.
Green, blue and yellow, now are fragile shells.

I never thought the colors would fade.
I kept some of the colors, the rest are in a grave.
Now I travel down this path that I myself made…--really good last lines.

You should make it longer, some people don't really like short poem. Though I'm not one of those people, I'm fine with any length of poem as long as it's good ;] Maybe work on using more powerful words to make your readers think. Good luck with future writing pieces, inform me if you edit this i love to see what people come up with

With all due respect,

Mackenzie

P.S.Great pen name :]

adriangarcia wrote:First of all, I'm not going to comment on a pen name. I prefer you keeping YOUR name. But, that's just me.

Second of all, I really like this poem. The poem flowed very well, the rhyming was exquisite, and the effect was subtle yet powerful.

Third of all, it really seemed like your were inspired by Robert Frost. Perhaps, a little too much. I saw a lot of similarities between your writing subject and his. I might steer clear of "nature" for that very reason, at least, until you can writer a poem without such a visible connecting thread.

Good poem though. One of the better ones on this site.

First of all, I'm not going to comment on a pen name. I prefer you keeping YOUR name. But, that's just me.

Second of all, I really like this poem. The poem flowed very well, the rhyming was exquisite, and the effect was subtle yet powerful.

Third of all, it really seemed like your were inspired by Robert Frost. Perhaps, a little too much. I saw a lot of similarities between your writing subject and his. I might steer clear of "nature" for that very reason, at least, until you can writer a poem without such a visible connecting thread.

Good poem though. One of the better ones on this site.

Well first off you must do two reviews when submitting a piece, just thought I'd inform you since you haven't done any reviews. I really liked this it was full of meaning and flowed really good.

How cold and gray the world may seem,
Down the road less traveled we’re rarely seen.

To go down a road that never ends,
Forever searching for curving bends.

The frozen snow nips at my feet.
And the whole world seems very bleak.

Things are now shells of what they once were.
And the once blue sky begins to blur.--I really liked this part

Things were once innocent, I’m sure you can tell.
Green, blue and yellow, now are fragile shells.

I never thought the colors would fade.
I kept some of the colors, the rest are in a grave.
Now I travel down this path that I myself made…--really good last lines.

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E.C Branwen is a Pen Name that I am considering using.

I dunno if it's good or not.
I want my Pen Name to start with an E. and end with Branwen but I don't know what letter to put inbetween.