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  • Short Story » General, General Re: Restaurant

    Hi I'm Ash and I am here to review! Okay so this is the first thing I noticed.You forgot to capitalize certain names and words throughout.For example you wrote "john" ...

    Mon Jun 20, 2016 12:21 pm
  • Short Story » Narrative, Realistic Re: Unexpressed feelings.

    Hello! How are you? This was really good! I really liked the idea you expressed in this.However, your grammar was a bit please look at your small grammatical errors first ...

    Mon Jun 20, 2016 2:32 am
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Spiritual Re: I Left My Heart

    Why, hello there! I just stumbled upon this poem and I love it. The way you worded it, just made it so real. I love this. Like yes, people will ...

    Sun Jun 12, 2016 1:06 pm
  • Poetry » General, Romantic Re: She was more interested in me than she was in boys.

    Hi wow, I love this poem. I just wanted to start with that. Okay. We got that over with. I'm not going to bombard you on whatever everyone before me ...

    Mon Jun 06, 2016 2:15 pm
  • Poetry » General, Literature Re: Dirty Laundry

    Hello! I am here to review! I love the formatting of this. And the detail in this is incredible. I especially love the line: "I will never know if I ...

    Mon Jun 06, 2016 2:04 pm
  • Short Story » General, Realistic Re: Maybe

    Yo it's Ash and I decided to stalk your portfolio.((BC friendship)). Aw yeah. ;) . Okay let's get started. Yeah this excited me a lot. The reason is because it ...

    Tue May 03, 2016 7:33 pm
  • Poetry » Other, Realistic Re: Pathetically In Love With You.

    Hi, I'm Ash and I'm here for a review. Wow.Just wow. You captured the bittersweetness of what love is just perfectly. All that I related to perfectly. Love is probably ...

    Sun May 01, 2016 1:35 pm
  • Poetry » Literature, General Re: All the World's a Stage

    Hi hi I'm here to review, how are you? Good? I hope so, okay let's get started!! I like how you started with one of Shakespeare's most famous lines as ...

    Sun May 01, 2016 12:44 am
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Romantic Re: I Love You Still

    Hello there, how are you? Okay, let's get started! The feelings were all too real in this.Honestly, I don't want to seem rude to the reviewers before me, but I ...

    Sat Apr 23, 2016 2:38 pm
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: When the Balcony Collapses

    Hi, I stumbled upon this, and decided, why not give it a review? Well, it started off simple and then got deep really someone who wants to be an English ...

    Sun Apr 03, 2016 9:05 pm
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: How to Successfully Elope in Hopes the Family Will Later Take You Back

    Your family sure does have an interesting story. I would love to sit around with you guys one day and hear more.I like how you presented everything clearly and kept ...

    Sun Apr 03, 2016 5:46 pm
  • Poetry » Realistic, Realistic Re: to my parents, who will never like me

    Holy mackerel. This poem was brilliant. The emotion was all too real. Being real in your writing is always really good.I actually relate to this poem a lot.I love the ...

    Sun Apr 03, 2016 5:29 pm
  • Short Story » Realistic, Narrative Re: For the Kindness You Once Showed Me

    Hello. This brought me to tears. Like I had to wipe my eyes and everything, so I could continue reading.This inspired me to do kind things, even if I don't ...

    Sun Apr 03, 2016 12:47 am
  • Poetry » Other, Literature Re: Poem: An Analysis

    Hi there, how are you? Okay I'm going to review starting now: Um just a quick little thing you spelt soiled wrong (That is okay.Jut fix it when you can ...

    Sun Apr 03, 2016 12:35 am
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Prom Night

    This reminds me of my prom last year. I contemplated not going, because of no date and what not. But I went, it was fun (although I walked into my ...

    Sun Apr 03, 2016 12:28 am


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