ashleylee

Hey, I'm your first review! :) Okay, now for the nit-picks. First, I thought you had a generally good start here. I mean, it had all the elements of a ...

It was good...until the end. I thought it was funny how she flipped them the bird but I think you could have ended that better with her happy, even though ...

Oh, I liked this a lot. It had so much feeling in it. Which makes poetry poetry ! And also because it was so true! Very well done. Great Job ...

Hey, I guess I'm the first girl to read this by your comments! Anyway, my advise is that this is too scattered. You go from one thing to another at ...

This was a little fast for me. I mean, you basically described your character but nothing of the plot. I found that you used simple details. Explain what the BMW ...

First, you really need to space this out more. I must admit I only read half-way through because it was too hard to read. It was too bulky for paragraphs. ...

Hello...yes I enjoyed this very much. It was very interesting and I agree with the first comment that this is my favorite stanza: Friction loses its mighty grip, as gravity ...

Okay, I liked this. It was really descriptive and I love that. The only nit-pick I have is this: Drops of fire, raining down, Setting alight all the ground. Consuming, ...

Yeah, this is really short. I think prologues should be longer than just one paragraph but that's just my opinion. Otherwise, I think you have a good start here. I ...

It was too short for me. I mean, you should put more description into it. It was too simple. It was as though you were reading off a list "Here's ...

Okay, I didn't find that much wrong with this piece. Only two nit-picks: “Keri, your red as an apple.” Liz laughed, Keri felt like slapping her over the face, but ...

OKay, I remember reading this before and I noticed you added more to it, which I hoped you would. All I have to say is this was really eerie. It ...

Hey Well, I thought this was very different from all the other stories I've read. And it's real. It talks about things that people (especially teens) can relate to. I ...

I think this was very descriptive. You described everything to the smallest of details, making it so easy for me to imagine what is going on. However, it is kind ...

Yeah, agree with the comments above me that prologues are normally longer than this. But besides that, I think you have an interesting start here. I mean, it makes the ...