ashleylee

Yeah, and this is Jasper's letter! I'm guessing you just made them smaller, huh? Well, this is as good the second time I read it as it was the first! ...

Yeah....umm....I read this chapter too :? I'm not really sure what's going on here.... I'm sorry...just PM me to tell me if you added chapters or something cause I'm confused... ...

Hey, jazz....I think I'm missing something...:? I've already read this chapter...EEK! Did you like add chapters or make them smaller or something cause I suddenly feel like I am going ...

Hey, I see that you don't have any reviews for this so ashley to the rescue! :wink: (yeah, I know I'm a dork) The morning was chilly with a slight ...

Hey, luc! :D Here by request and ready to review! Carefully, the people of New York scanned the headlines, shaking their heads in astonishment: one man killed, leaving his six ...

Chapter six review on it's way! :wink: “I am so sorry Laura; I apologize sincerely for the long wait. If you would please follow me.” Comma after "sorry" “Please.” He ...

Sorsha, you have no idea how excited I got when you PMed me about having chapter five and six up for this story. I couldn't read it yesterday cause I ...

Hi! I have been looking at this story and kind of reading it for the past few days but I finally have time to read the whole thing. :wink: But ...

Hey, Alice. I don't think I have read any of your work before but I saw this and the title caught my eye. So here I go reviewing! :wink: “Just ...

Hey, playerj09! :D Here I am, ready to review! Comments in bold, corrections in red "My God comma James What are you thinking?", the commander and chief of the United ...

Hey, Mars! Thanks for PMing me about this! :D “Sorry I had to slap you, I was just afraid you were going to start drooling.” Jordan told me as she ...

Boon, I saw a few other pieces of this and I'm afraid I am reading the wrong one...I know you said something about astriks for decided to read this one. ...

Chapter four! This was amazing! You have such a way with making things so realistic without giving too much away. I found nothing wrong with this chapter. Everything seems to ...

Chapter three, here I go :wink: hehe When Laura awoke it was to find herself surrounded by darkness. This is very oddly worded. Try instead something like: When Laura awoke, ...

Here I am, Sorsha, for chapter two! :wink: “Yes Commander.” Kyle answered with a tip of his mug in salute. “We were just discussing a few details before turning in ...