ashleylee

Hey, Kels! I’m sorry I’m like super late on getting to this, and no I haven’t started on the chapters yo printed out yet but I will after I finish ...

Hey, Bri! Here is the promised review, even though it was slow in coming :wink: His black shirt wore out his six-pact and clings to the muscles that ripped down ...

Hey, Castles! Sorry it took me so long to get this this. It seems that a lot of people beat me here, but I'll try to help as best as ...

Yes, please don't be nervous. Most people on here do give constructive critisism and would love to help you grow as a writer. So from now on, don't be afraid ...

Whoa, it seems that Castles got here before me and seemed to have covered everything... but I'll try my best to come up with something :wink: hehe Tenth grade at ...

Well, I liked the side that you showed. I think most of the comments above caught was I was going to mention, like tenses for instance. What I want to ...

Yeah, this was really well written. I enjoyed the drama that you created and the emotions pouring from it. Well Done :D My only worry is that sometimes, the wording ...

Wow, I love this! :D The way you capture your MC's voice is amazing. Everything is so raw and lifelike. I can just picture this in my mind, this girl ...

Hi, Liven! Nice to meet you, and Welcome to YWS! :D I see that mizz-iceberg has filled you in on the rules here, so now my only job is to ...

Hola, Bleeding Rose. I've decided to review something of yours since you have been so kind to me in that department :wink: It was a rich man that was lonely. ...

Because deep down in her heart she knows that there’s something there for Mackenzie and because she knows that he won’t hurt her the way James did. Why? What did ...

Hey, Passion. I'm back because your title is so intriging that I couldn't help but check out your next chapter. :wink: “Why should I?” Dorine spat at him. “Why should ...

Beside the bed, stood a desk and a simple wooden stool. Use a different word beside "simple". It works against the flow of your story. She lay with her eyes ...

Ribbons of dusty road sprang up and disappeared in the underbrush, connecting each village with the next, with the distant cities, and, ultimately, with a dark and shrouded land known ...

I just love it. "Loved" instead of "love" Putting the key in the ignition, I pushed the heater button on. Pulling the car in reverse, I drove out of the ...