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Great job. I can't really find anything to point out. You have great comparisons, and your rhymes don't seem very forced. You did well. :D

Like people before me have said, it's not bad for something that was rushed. It's not even bad for something that wasn't rushed. I can deffinately imagine how the tune ...

It's good, very good. It makes me want to read more. Are you planning on posting another part? You're a talented writer. Good job. :D

I love it. It's funny, whitty, aand fun overall. There is only one thing I'd look at. I'm near the place where that guy- *gulps* Right there I wasn't sure ...

Thanks everyone. I have written the next part, but I need to brush it up a bit before I post it here. It's all on paper. I just have to ...

I loved it. You did great with the vivid descriptions.Way to go! :D

I love your theme. It's very interesting. Lilymoore got both of my nitpicks. Like I saaid I love your theme. :D

A fairy can also be called a faery, faerie, fay, or fae. :) I always have difficulties with forcing my rhymes. Thanks for the reviews!

Thanks for the review. I edited it a little, but I'm going to finish editing in a while. I didn't really like the title (still don't) so I changed it. ...