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hi i really liked this work i say that it was a bit interesting for several reasons. First off... White cotton fell from the sky outside our secluded hiding place. ...

Hi. I will be reveiwer today. So, now on to the review... This is a good story. Short, but good. I think that it starts of well kind of hard ...

This is a very good story. Like both the reviwers said before it is confusing in the beining. Keep what you have, but add on to it say what happened. ...

This is okay. It definatly has some potential. It does need some work though. Sorry to say, but i wasn't hooked. I didn't get the spark of good writting when ...

Hi and welcome to YWS! Make sure that you read the rules. Please review two people's posts if you already haven't. Secondly this is my review on your post. The ...

Sounds that made her skin pimple with goosebumps and her scalp crawl as if phantom fingers stroked her hair. This is okay. I personaly don't like the fact her skin ...

This is good. I later found out that both of them took poison and were seen laying on the bed, holding each other's hands. Now isn't that a sweet ending? ...

This is scary. There was no major gramatical errors that i could see. You are very descriptive about your characters and setting. The only thing you should fix is telling ...

This is pretty good It is some what depressing. I think you tried to lighten up the mood of it with jokes but the way I see it, it isn't ...

I think that this poem is great. You show the reality and the fact that it is hard to be the 'beatiful girl'. The lesson I took from this poem ...

She smiled at him closed her eyes. you need to add an and in between him and close It doesnt make any sense without it. You could also be more ...

This is a very good story. It is very well formated and it is powerful. Try not to put things in () it makes it more personal when you don't. ...

Please do not give up on this it is really good. I love the way you described your situation. [quote]I never could see what my best friend saw in him ...

I really like the story. It is very suspenseful there are a few grammar errors. Other than that it is really good. I hope there is another part. Mr. Gregory ...

Hi Evi, I absolutly love your story. It had an intresting hook. I couldn't stop reading it. The title was what really got me. Write more, i want to hear ...