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ahem... For you i will write a song and sing it, I love you, i admit it. Your a dream come true I could not have coped without you. I ...

I liked this. I can't decide if the rhyming helped or was distracting, But I agree that it was a little jarring for the last to lines not to rhyme ...

Exciting! I like how the bandits are trying to teach them stuff instead of just eating their brains. That's really original. And mysterious because we don't know what they want ...

I have long, un-brushed hair of an indeterminate color. Funky! No mind powers though. But anyway, I loved you story. You have the best ideas! such cool mind powers. And ...

I like this alot. It was kind of mysterious and it seemed almost to go in circle, like wheeling dancer? I dunno, that sounds really wierd. But I like it. ...

I like it! I love autumn and this is such a cool concept. A few small things... "I let air fill up in it Then sealed it up real tight" ...

I liked this mostly. It was a little wordy though. Maybe edit it some, or break the first part up into more stanzas, and it would be easier to read. ...

I loved this. You have great images, and the last two lines were really poweful. The long lines didn't bother me at all. Isn't there some kind of style called ...

I liked it. I don't think I would have known what it's about if you didn't say but that's ok. I think you should take out the first "everywhere", it ...

I agree with emotion_less about the paragraphs. Breaking it up a bit would make it easier to read. I like it though. Lots of good descriptions. "But yet she persisted" ...

I loved the first part. The line breaks and the rhythm are awesome. I think the last part is cool, it does lose momentum but it fits because that's what ...

I liked this one too. life was gone as surely as the creeping tide. Loved that. And the whole thing is really interesting. Sorry, no stick-beating. But very cool poem. ...

Personally I loved this, I don't know what you think is wrong with it. Its so sad, and sweet, but not only sweet. I liked how you made it so ...

I liked this alot, it sounded like a song or something. I loved the first two stanzas. Like Writersdomain said it was great the way you used 'etched'. It reminded ...

I like this alot. It's simple and sweet and... soothing, or something. The thing you said with story stanzas might be interesting, maybe if they didn't rhyme and just this ...