anniegirl123

The idea for the scene was good, but it needs some work. There isn't really much description in this story, you need to be more detailed about things such as ...

I liked the idea you had on what it would be like to have the ability to understand animals. It would get really annoying pretty quick. I also found it ...

I like the way the narrator originally describes the girl, and how he seems to especially like her eyes. Or how he usually doesn't like people talking but he likes ...

Sammy does seem like the perfect stereotype of what adults think teenagers are. Always on their phones no matter what... I like how realistic this felt, with Mollie never getting ...

I feel like some parts would have sounded better if they had been worded differently, such as Unexpecting it, he stumbles from the impact. which I think would have sounded ...

Oh wow, aliens attacking the earth... A bit cliche but I liked the way you wrote it, it made it a bit different from other similar stories. And thinking of ...

Wow, that story was really good, I didn't expect that type of ending. It makes me curious as to what or who exactly Heather is and why she is evil... ...

It was good! There were a few grammar mistakes such as in the beginning where you forgot a few spaces. Also I liked that quote by Albert Einstein you put ...

I really liked this poem, especially how you ended it. I like how it starts off showing how simple people and life used to be like seeing only two colors ...

I really liked all the descriptive word you used as they gave me a good mental picture of the setting. And the setting also did a good job of setting ...

First, I feel like you used way too many complex sentences so there was no variety which made it feel a bit dull. And this paragraph especially needs some work. ...

I like your use of onomatopoeia with the alarm clock, though right after I don't think the simile "I feel my eyes are as stiff as a deer in headlights." ...

I loved the way you used metaphors such ass when you described his blood as wine, or when you compared the darkness and silence to a coffin lid. And it ...