annaseale1998

OK, so, I'd correct the grammar, but that's already been done. You really need to take more care with it. So the main problem I have with this is that ...

I love the start you've made! It flows brilliantly, there's no fault with the rhythm or rhyme at all. The only problem I have with it is that it's not ...

This is really good! But you're right, what is this? If I had to say, then maybe a prologue, or a preface, or epigraph? I struggled to keep up with ...

This is actually quite good! I loved it from start to finish, but there are some things I would change. They were very happy. You should take away the 'very'. ...

It was originally the title that got me to read this, and I'm glad it did. It was just plain fun to read. The first line was good, made you ...

I feel as though this should be a two verse poem, because of where you put your rhymes. I think the whole thing may have flowed better if it were ...

Welcome to YWS :) So, at first, this seemed like a normal murderer, but is it really a vampire? Because you said 'and gorged itself on her life'. What really ...

'On a lovely Summer day.' Shouldn't it be 'On a lovely Summer's day'? Also, I wish there weren't as many spaces between the stanzas, I think it breaks it up ...

Is this about a ghost? Sorry if it isn't, but that's the only guess I have about what's going on here. I loved the overall idea, it was short and ...

Warm cup of milk and honey - yuck! Good poem, sweet like honey :) I like how you repeated the words 'Milk and honey'. Short and nice, and made me ...

I love the last two lines, taking an old happy-tuned song and putting a really sad twist on to it. I think if you had made it any longer, it ...

Firstly, I have to say that this was really, REALLY good. I like how the person evolved during the poem, and how she ended up happy at the end. The ...

Really good :) I liked it a lot! The rhythm kept up well, and I didn't find myself tripping over any of the sentences. I couldn't find any faults with ...

This was really good! I had to read it twice, because I didn't understand it, though, and even when I had finished I still didn't get the ending. I don't ...

WOW! This was REALLY good! I loved how at the end, where the person's life is a 'lifeless shell' but it still says 'And my life is perfect'. I literally ...