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Re: It Starts With Heavy Metal
Wow, this just made me want to listen to heavy metal or screamo, which I rarely do. I love how you incorporate all 5 senses into this poem. Here are ...
Dec 8, 2011 -
Re: In the Arms of a Warlock - Chapter Three
I really liked this! *clicks the like button* I admit that I didn't read the other three chapters but this chapter makes me want to. It kept my attention the ...
Dec 6, 2011 -
Re: How?
I actually really liked this. It had a great simplicity and obvious emotion. Here's some suggestions: Why is my life based on pain (maybe take out the s) ? No ...
Dec 5, 2011 -
Re: Flimsy
I loved how natural the dialogue is!!! Honestly, it is super hard to make characters that speak to each other so well. I love how they banter back and forth ...
Nov 30, 2011 -
Re: Procrastination, Old Friend of Mine.
So true!!! Love the topic of this poem! I thought it was really neat to present it like a conversation. One note: I would capitalize the "names" that you use. ...
Nov 30, 2011 -
Re: If I Was Her?
I appreciated the rawness of this. I agreed with barefootrunner, though, I think you should condense it into just your main ideas. I loved how the second and third stanzas ...
Nov 29, 2011 -
Re: Striving for Strife
WOW! I really loved this poem. And, thanks for mentioning the love and hate bit because I totally didn't see it until you pointed it out. I thought it was ...
Nov 28, 2011 -
Re: A Gray Delivery
I agree with LividRose. You took a situation as simple and boring as eating a pizza alone in your living room and turned it into poetry. I loved the bluntness ...
Nov 26, 2011 -
Re: Our Stop
WOW! I really loved this poem. It covers all the senses and mentions a lot of topics of the times. I have some suggestions: With the people I don't write ...
Nov 24, 2011 -
Re: Filter
I really like this song. I bet it would sound even better with music! Here are some suggestions: But I still love you anyway I still think that you can ...
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: DESCENT
Yes, this is horrible. But in an interesting way. I liked the different mediums, like the newspaper article, the journal, and the obituary (which I thought could be longer - ...
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: A Secret Slogan
I really liked this poem! I looked at the original format, I thought it was unique. If you are going to have punctuation, then it needs some work. If, not ...
Nov 22, 2011 -
Re: NaNoWriMo
Ok, firstly I want the rest! I don't have any idea where you're going with it but I like what I just read. It was engaging. Ok, I have some ...
Nov 22, 2011 -
Re: Drown Me
Wow. Such great emotion. I'm sorry about your friendship, but you used it to make something quite good. I am going to give you some suggestions: You held me underwater, ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Wanton
I really loved this. I think it is such a great format to use! I vote yay for your first stanza. But I have a suggestion: Your smile beckons, enchanting ...
Nov 14, 2011
