amelie

My dearest Mem I'm trying to figure out the significance of you keeping your hair the way you want in poetic terms. Because what a reader looks for in a ...

Hi! It's me again:) Should you stay, he says in fright, do not let the metaphorical knife bite. the metaphorical knife? Knives usually cut, not bite. And I'm not sure ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS!! Lovely poem. I like the idea- but I don't think it was executed properly. Monster, monster he is under my bed. His claws scratch my hands, ...

Hellooo So far I feel like this book is appealing more to a younger audience. The complexity is pretty relaxed, making it a heck of a lot easier for littler ...

Hiii Matt! Wow. This is a whole lotta crazy going on in one song sooo I'm gonna help out where I can-- If I can. Firstly, the story conveyed through ...

Hi Mem!! For once I decided to actually participate in review day, so here goes. My first impressions of this are sheer bitterness. Bitterness towards your mother as you've gone ...

Hey Ats! I read this the other day and really loved it, so I wanted to come back and review it. Apologies if I screw something up, I have a ...

I left a comment earlier, but now I'd like to leave a review. The first thing I notice about this is obviously the length. And I would honestly love to ...

Hi Joseph! First off, this is such a beautiful story. I love the imagery. As for critiques, I'll begin with those. Like I previously mentioned, you have some really good ...

Hey cedesxana.:) There really isn't much to go off of here, but I'll try my best to help out. Beginning with the title, "The End," just seems a little off. ...

Hey Spartan! So, I somewhat like the concept of talking about nice things like love and happiness and butterflies and sugarplums, but as I'm reading through it, I honestly can't ...

Hello TMWoods! I think the story you are telling is quite interesting, but your main issue here is the punctuation. There's definitely an over-usage of commas and a lot of ...

Hey Matt. I believe I already spoke with you about this awhile ago, but reading over it again I found a few things I wanted to mention other than the ...

Hi Matt. Since this was a personal song, I really can't critique much of it. I think it's a huge improvement and it was done fairly well. I do want ...

Okay, I am on a mission. Sorry if I end up repeating myself. So I think your main problem here is story-telling. Though it's a song, there's this story you ...