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The grammar you spoke of was supposed to be edited, my computer refuses to fix it evidently, blah. I apologize for it not making as much sense, I strayed from ...

I will be posting more of this story as soon as I work some of the major bugs; it's looks horrible at the moment. :?

Well at this moment all I can say is it sounds like a good beginning. I hope you write more so I can give you a critique, I want to ...

Thanks a lot, I redid it and added some more things, I hope it sounds better now. :D

I'm not sure what to say critique wise for this except it was brilliant. I'd love to read more of your work, if it is indeed as good as this ...

Holy guacamole dude, that's far from ehhhh, that's some awesome stuff. :D I love death stuff.

I must say for 14 that is a great story, you are writing more right? :D Great job and keep it up you'll be famous some day I'm sure.

Your writing is excellent, I have no negative comments. Keep up the great work. :D

I'll fix it, sorry for freaking out on you.