Love like a Moth

by kris

Published July 26, 2009

Love like a Moth.

I have been dreaming unbroken, for the longest time.
For as long Earth has spun, or all the points between each star.
Of his voice that resonates, rendering me servile - enchanted.
Blackness pours from his hands,
covering his mouth, like lacquer - shining, effulgent.

I am the moth to this colourless flame; wings scorched with delusion.
In me springs forth a profusion
of feelings felt in seclusion,
far removed from the world outside...

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kris
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kris commented Comment · Jul 27, 2009

Thank you for your kind review.
Though I am certain that there must be something[i] wrong with it.

Please, anymore critique?

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amatuli commented Comment · Jul 27, 2009

I'm not sure what to say critique wise for this except it was brilliant. I'd love to read more of your work, if it is indeed as good as this one was. :D



Don't aim at success--the more you aim at it and make it a target, the more you are going to miss it. For success, like happiness, cannot be pursued; it must ensue, and it only does so as the unintended side-effect of one's dedication to a cause greater than oneself or as the by-product of one's surrender to a person other than oneself.
— Viktor E. Frankl