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Hi Jamine. May take me longer to review the rest of the chapters because of the hurricane, though we'll probably just get rain. This is going to be at least ...

Hi. Sorry it took me so long. The room was vacant except for the wooden object. This is okay but this may work better: The room was vacant, with the ...

*runs down to get printed copy from YWS folder* Here's the promised review. :) As she lay on her back, the nurse Laid, according to Microsoft Word when I printed ...

For some people, it's not one of those 'duh' things. One of my friends wants to be popular. She knows she's not perfect and will openly admit to it, but ...

Hi HC. I agree, it was a rushed and short. I'm glad to say that there's only a few things that stood out to me. If she had, it would ...

Hi HC. I only noticed two things and I'm starting to figure it out now. :) that had been covered in holes that she had hated. There's a lot of ...

Hi Wisemann. Northern star, You’re so bright. You sit afar, Yet give me light. Sometimes I wish, I could hold you near. But your hot kiss, This is okay but ...

Hi Xxfourthelement. To me, she just seemed to ramble. You described her well, though, so good job on that. I'm Vera Icharus. Today is my first day at my new ...

Hi Otaku. Here as requested. I was about to head out the door, when Rena came over to me. No comma there because there doesn't need to be a pause ...

Hi wisemann, here as promised. Sorry it took me so long. “Okay" Period at the end. “Help me” Period. “Please Mr. Turtle, I could sure use your help” Period at ...

Hi Eimear. I think that Leja got everything but I'm going to try my best. Thud, thud, thud. Perhaps I am light-headed, my breath’s too short for air. But when ...

Hi Clo, here to review. his voicing crackling static I'm having a little hard time with imagining someone's voice crackling static. Maybe replace Crackling with Was? It sounded like an ...

Hi, here as requested. located in the northwest corner of Ohio at the juncture between the Maumee River and Lake Erie, This is too much info. As a reader, it ...

Hi ProfessorRabbit, here to review as promised. As Kyte said, it's kind of hard to review this piece because it's so good. However, after rereading and rereading again, I did ...

Hi TL. Here to review, as promised. I'm new to fantasy fiction so if I'm wrong about something, feel free to correct me. Very, very gently, I Sensed his mind. ...