ahollander

WOW! This my friend is a beautiful piece of work. It has a harry potter vibe to it. Which is not bad at all, because your story is completely unique. ...

Well this was pleasantly surprising... I'm laughing so hard I can barely breath. Oh goodness, where do i even start? Well from what I can tell there are no grammar ...

Okay, so owww my heart just burst into a million pieces! These letters are so beautifully written that they tug at your heart strings. A few things I would like ...

Okay so overall very good start. However, I agree with some of the other reviewers, the first sentence is off. As another reviewer suggested, lose the "does" and change feel ...

Okay, so this is really cool. I LOVE it! I think the best part for me is the relationship you've created with all three guys. I didn't notice any grammatical ...

Wow! So, I thought this was a really cool piece. I literally could not stop reading. Now don't get offended by this, but while I was reading I kept thinking ...

WOW, um just wow. At first I didn't really know what was going on, but as I kept reading I started to get it. I wouldn't worry about that its ...

Okay so first off WOW. I get the feeling this is kind of a play on Robin Hood. I might be completely wrong, but that's what I got from it. ...

Hello, first of all i found this "Her eyes shot open and she sat strait up." I believe that you meant to write "straight up" being that what you used ...

Hi, I agree with what emjayc had to say. Just watch your verb tense, because it does jump around. I really like Kiere as a character, she is straight up ...

Hi, First off, I really like this story, i think it could be great if you continue writing. The first thing i think would make it better is if you ...