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I like the growing apart feel of it. It a good comming of age poem.

That was great. It rhymed and it was humorous. Those two things go great unlike water and a light switch. And I like the sarcastic humor at the end. Sarcasm ...

I also like the sand castle analogy. This was a really good poem and the vocabulary even better. I loved the message too. It's true!! Just live life and be ...

This was so cute!! This just made me laugh. You write the funniest poems, ever!!!! Keep on writing.

This poem ended pretty abruptly, but it that what happpens when people die from drugs and/or suiside? This was a good poem. Its kinda an eye opener for the ignorant ...

That poem scared something out of me because it felt like it was really only adivise is to break it up into stanzas. Overall it good!!!

There is this book with the same plot it's called Twilight.

This is the final version. I hope everyone likes it. Its my emotions I felt on a trip to a city. Its how I felt when I fell in love ...

Okay. I thought it was good when I wrote it. I just wrote what I felt.

Here's the revised version: Running down the streets, Like there’s no tomorrow, My tan overcoat flying As I tiptoe though the brick sidewalks, Racing past brimstone apartment by another, By ...

Space it out!!!! Please!!

I love it and there is nothing more to say opinionwise. It has a sence if confort, obvious talent here!

It doesn't suck it was good and it is meaningful.

That was good. But give more info on the guy. How did he charm the speaker, why does she hate it, and how is she drawn to him? i like ...

That was a deep and moving poem. You obiviously have talent!!!! Kepp up the good work!